Comments on: Another Little Writing Exercise: Varying Sentence Openings

By: Clay Burell

Clay Burell — Thu, 03 Apr 2008 07:16:35 +0000

I had a ninth grader write, I believe, _fourteen_ versions of this - and most all of them worked.

By: Danielle

Danielle — Wed, 02 Apr 2008 04:41:47 +0000

He was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger when the bus came out of nowhere and ran over him

1.He was crossing the street, quickly and happily eating a hamburger, when out of nowhere the bus came out and ran over him.

2.The bus came out of nowhere and ran over him when he was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger.

3. Out of nowhere the bus came out and ran over him when he was quickly and happily eating a hamburger crossing the street.

4. He was quickly and happily eating a hamburger crossing the street when the bus cam out of nowhere and ran over him.

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Of Little Pricks and April Fools | Beyond School — Tue, 01 Apr 2008 23:09:23 +0000

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By: Clay Burell

Clay Burell — Tue, 01 Apr 2008 01:56:33 +0000

@Kaelie: you’re one more piece of evidence that a teacher’s best students are more and more not even in his school. I wish you were.

By: Kaelie Curbxstomp

Kaelie Curbxstomp — Tue, 01 Apr 2008 01:03:27 +0000

O.o I only did one sentence….I apologize.

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By: Kaelie Curbxstomp

Kaelie Curbxstomp — Tue, 01 Apr 2008 01:02:47 +0000

Not fair! Taylor took mine. Ugh. Hm… The bus came out of nowhere and ran over him when he was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger.
I for one, would not eat a hamburger while I was crossing a street… I can barely walk and talk at the same time. Anyway, I really do have problem with varying the sentence structures. I’ll look back over some writing and realize it all sounds the same! Thanks for this!

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By: diane

diane — Sun, 30 Mar 2008 18:01:06 +0000

“He was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger when the bus came out of nowhere and ran over him.”

1. When the bus came out of nowhere and ran over him, he was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger.

2. When he was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger, the bus came out of nowhere and ran over him.

3. Out of nowhere, the bus came and ran over him, when he was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger.

4. He was happily eating a hamburger and quickly crossing the street, when a bus came out of nowhere and ran over him.

5. A bus came out of nowhere and ran over him when he was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger.

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By: Taylor

Taylor — Sun, 30 Mar 2008 17:38:07 +0000

He was quickly and happily crossing the street eating a hamburger when the bus came out of nowhere and ran over him.

Quickly and happily, he was crossing the street eating a hamburger when the bus came out of nowhere and hit him.

The bus came out of nowhere, running him over as he crossed the street, quickly and happily, eating a hamburger.

Out of nowhere, the bus came and hit him as he quickly and happily crossed the street eating a hamburger.

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